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Post by Leonard on May 27, 2017 15:10:33 GMT
Thank You very much, I'm going to use all these.
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Post by Lionblaze on May 27, 2017 16:06:18 GMT
When Foxclaw said "I'm doing you a favour, kittypet. Don't you forget that. I think you meant "favor"
When Galeflower said "You should go join other apprentices." I think you meant "You should go join THE other apprentices."
When Antwhisker said "Dont dissapoint the clan." "dissapoint" is supposed to be spelled "disappoint"
When Duskpaw says "You know Nettlepaw. She's always speaks for everyone." I think you meant "You know Nettlepaw, She always speaks for everyone."
The definition for "Battle Animations" in the "System" part of the menu is "Hide animations during battle to speed up battles?" I think you meant "Hides animations during battles to speed up battles."
The definitions for SFX Volume, BGS Volume, BGM Volume, Window Blue, Window Green and Window Red in the "System" part of the menu begins with "Change" I think you meant "Changes"
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Post by Lionblaze on May 27, 2017 16:30:33 GMT
Looking through the credits file, you put Lightflame, WarriorWolf15 and Voramel on there twice. prntscr.com/fcqpwz
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Post by Guest on May 27, 2017 16:40:57 GMT
When Kestrelpaw says, "Sorry, I fell ill. Blackheart wants me to stay in his den for some time." I think you meant "felt" not "fell" When Duskpaw says, "There you are! I was wondering where did you go." I think you meant "There you are! I was wondering, where did you go?" Actually, "fell ill" is grammatically correct. It's the past tense of fall ill, which means to become ill. And when Duckpaw says, "There you are! I was wondering where did you go" I think the correct way to say it would be "There you are! I was wondering where you went."
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Post by Lightflame on May 27, 2017 17:10:46 GMT
Looking through the credits file, you put Lightflame, WarriorWolf15 and Voramel on there twice. prntscr.com/fcqpwzHe was crediting both me and the character named Lightflame, who is actually alive.
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Post by Snowspirit on May 27, 2017 17:22:33 GMT
Looking through the credits file, you put Lightflame, WarriorWolf15 and Voramel on there twice. prntscr.com/fcqpwzHe was crediting both me and the character named Lightflame, who is actually alive. Does that mean that you are dead?
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Post by troubledspar7an on May 27, 2017 18:21:12 GMT
No, it would not be correct because they state that Kestrelpaw was already ill. No because it's past tense? I'm confused by your denial. Actually, "fell ill" is grammatically correct. It's the past tense of fall ill, which means to become ill. It is past tense as it is already, as the Guest said.
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Post by Leonard on May 27, 2017 18:32:47 GMT
Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! Does that mean that you are dead? I like to have different Lightflames every release. So far we've had Lightflame, Lighty, and LF. Old Lightflames occasionally make cameos, but they're not that common. Lightflame supposedly died, but not really. Lighty is kind of absent. LF has died for real, but don't worry, there will be next Lightflame with a new nickname upon the next RtI release.
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Post by Lionblaze on May 27, 2017 21:26:55 GMT
Leonard, dont ignore the other two that were in there twice, WarriorWolf15 and Voramel
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Post by troubledspar7an on May 27, 2017 22:59:38 GMT
I don't think you understand
Both are grammatically correct. It just depends on which usage it is meant to be. Fell would be "Sorry, I fell ill..." Meaning that Kestrelpaw was indeed sick and had to be treated. (sim. fall) Felt would be "Sorry, I felt ill..." Meaning that Kestrelpaw was not sick, however she only felt/feels like she was. (sim. feel)
The 'Fell' interpretation fits the second sentence better. Blackheart would be more likely to want Kestrelpaw to stay in his den for sometime if they were indeed sick, instead of just feeling like they were.
This is about the matter that neither are grammatically correct. They carry different meanings to the sentence, so, your 'typo' isn't really a typo there. Rather, you changing the meaning of the sentence that Kestrelpaw was saying. I understand that you may be confused because you seem to have the preconceived notion of what the sentence is supposed to mean, making 'fell' seem like a typo; however the typo is really proper spelling, just bringing a different meaning to the sentence.
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Post by ✨ ωιѕт ✨ on May 28, 2017 18:46:14 GMT
At the beginning of the game, Thrushfeather says, "You shouldn't enter it. Warriors' don't like to be bothered." The apostrophe shouldn't be in "Warriors"!
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Post by ✨ ωιѕт ✨ on May 28, 2017 18:49:23 GMT
Also in the beginning of the game, Thrushfeather says "None of the patrols came back yet, so the pile is empty." It should probably be "None of the patrols have come back yet, so the pile is empty."
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Post by ✨ ωιѕт ✨ on May 28, 2017 18:51:42 GMT
Again in the beginning of the game, Thrushfeather says, "I forgot you don't know the code. Warrior code is the rules that the Clans agreed to live by." The last sentence would sound better if it was worded like, "The warrior code is the rules that the Clans agreed to live by."
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Post by Leonard on May 28, 2017 19:04:29 GMT
Thanks, all fixed.
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Post by ✨ ωιѕт ✨ on May 28, 2017 19:27:56 GMT
Thrushfeather says in the beginning, "Here, we have nursery and Medicine cat's den." It should be, "Here, we have the nursery and medicine cat's den."
She also says, "The big den is Nursery, the small one is medicine cat's." It should say, "The big den is the nursery and the small one is the medicine cat's."
She a l s o says, "Nursery is place where queens and their kits rest." It should say, "The nursery is the place where queens and their kits rest."
Thrushfeather says, "There is a disagreement regarding how it should be applied. RiverClan believes that only Clan kits are under its' protection." Since 'it' is possessive in this case, it should say, "RiverClan believes that only Clan kits are under its protection."
Thrushfeather says, "I heard that Kestrelpaw is sick, and is resting there. You probably should visit your friend." The comma in the first sentence shouldn't be there, and in the second sentence, while it's not /wrong/, it'd probably sound better if probably and should were switched. SO, "I heard that Kestrelpaw is sick and is resting there. You should probably visit your friend."
She says, "This place here is the Leader's den." 'Leader' shouldn't be capitalized.
She says, "Behind the leader's den is the Elder's den." 'Elder' shouldn't be capitalized.
Thrushfeather says, "Elders are cats who can't serve their Clan anymore. Either because of old age or permanent medical condition." The period should be a comma, so: "Elders are cats who can't serve their Clan anymore, either because of old age or permanent medical condition."
Thrushfeather says, "Elders are taken care for by the whole Clan. But most of the tasks are simple enough that apprentices handle them." It should say, "Elders are taken care of by the whole Clan, but most of the tasks are simple enough that apprentices handle them."
Thrushfeather says, "Like kits and Queens, they are fed before the rest of the Clan." 'Queens' should not be capitalized.
Redflower says, "Don't mind Mosstail. He just has a bad day." It would probably sound better if it said, "Don't mind Mosstail, he's just having a bad day."
Blackheart says, "The only hope for you, is to get another apprentice's heart." This is a comma splice; it should say, "The only hope for you is to get another apprentice's heart."
Blackheart says, "Jokes aside, medicine cat has two duties." It should say, "Jokes aside, a medicine cat has two duties."
Blackheart says, "But don't worry -character's name-." It should say, "But don't worry, -character's name-."
Blackheart says, "Come stop by, if you are feeling ill, or if you will get hurt." It should say, "Come stop by if you are feeling ill or if you get hurt."
Kestrelpaw says, "The youngest apprentices have the choice of whom they will spar with." It should be 'who' rather than 'whom'
Kestrelpaw says, "She thinks of practice as a chore, and so has little technique." It should say, "She thinks of practice as a chore, so she has little technique."
Kestrelpaw says, "And, there's me." It would probably sound better if it said, "Then there's me."
Blackheart says, "Don't worry Kestrelpaw." It should say, "Don't worry, Kestrelpaw."
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